The book project:
Introduction: |
In this project we wrote a personal narrative of a story in our life that stood out to us and that could have made a big impact on us. We learned many different things about the journey of a hero throughout a story, description and dialogue. My story was just a very memorable moment in my childhood.
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the launch: |
On the launch of our project, Dr. P gave us a writing prompt about internships. We had to describe our surroundings and how it would be like. After that activity we had a mini field trip by walking up to Vons to observe or interview someone to work on our descriptions.
I wrote about a lady who was working next to where I was sitting. As you can see on the left is what I wrote. |
how I won the right to the streets of Memphis staging |
We read this passage called "how I won the right to the streets of Memphis" and each table group got a mini scene or episode. With that we had to preform the scene on how we envision it with the description and dialogue the passage included. Looking back on that assignment, I realized that it help me figure out where different paragraphs would be. After time, after an event, when someone talks etc. Also it helped me be more descriptive as if someone was trying to preform a scene like how we did. Last but not least it helped me with dialogue and how you don't need to use a lot but be wise with the dialogue I chose to add.
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initial story ideas |
My initial story ideas had a pattern to them. It was funny then dangerous then memorable and then it repeats. I didn't notice till I had to right down stories on how boring my life is. I realized that I really need to take more chances and risks in my life and not always take the safe and easy path. With the moments I was able to define I really remember those times vividly and each one effected whom I am today. Fighting with my brother made me want to get closer to him. Being stuck in a tree house made me miss my childhood. Even getting in trouble as a kid made me act more mature.
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Hero's journey: |
The hero's journey didn't really effect my piece directly but the order of events did follow even before we learned it. I thought it was helpful for a lot of people and I noticed that other people's writing got a lot better. For me it wasn't that big of a help but it did show that I was on track with my writing.
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final shell description: |
I used the skills I learned with describing an object to describe the tree house and I do think that I helped bring my narrative to life.I have nothing really more to so you can see my description on the right.
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final draft |
The first draft I wrote ended up being really good. I was so surprised with myself but I did get critique from several people. I asked for multiple critique from Dr. P and each time I asked for critique the feedback got smaller and smaller and I asked him why am I not getting as specific feedback and he said that if there is nothing really obvious to change then don't make any changes for the time being. I listened to him so the last few changes I made was just grammar and spelling.
I am overall very proud of how well my narrative came out and I wouldn't change anything. I did wanted to add more in draft one but then I realized I would be making the whole story a little too long and stretching it out. I did get lots of positive comments back from people reading it and they asked me how I wrote it so well and honestly I've just been good at writing. Which is odd because I don't really enjoy reading! |
Golden moment from exhibition |
A lot of people came to my booth so I can read and share my narrative with them and it made me feel really good that many people actually really enjoyed it. Some of the middle schoolers were laughing at some parts and they asked me if this really happened and who my friend was. I did wish we planned out exhibition differently because it was sort of a fail at the beginning because no one showed up for an hour and we looked dumb with no one to present to.
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